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Standard-Issue Partner, Chapter 1

Standard-Issue Partner
Neon lights flicker,
Machines replace flesh and bone,
Trust must still be earned.
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This is a draft version of a chapter from John Saye’s book, Standard-Issue Partner.

Flint and Roberts sat, thirty stories in the sky. It was raining as the other hovercars sped around them. Roberts repositioned the vehicle, moving it closer to the edge of the high-rise building, and under a short ledge, out of the rain. Flint fiddled with the controls in front of him, and an image came in, fuzzy at first, on a screen in front of them.

“I’ve got him,” said Flint.

“Are you sure?”

Images on the screen flickered. It looked as if several people were eating dinner in an Italian restaurant.

“That’s him.” Flint waved at the screen.

“So it is.”

Roberts hooked the hovercar into the side of the building, and engaged a clamp mechanism, locking the car to the side of it. Rain poured down all around them. The night was settling in, and the only light was flickering on them from their instrument screens, and from hover cars speeding nearby.

“How is the robot doing?” asked Roberts.

“Not that bad considering. It’s got a good bead on them.”

“Not like those new ones?”

“I suppose not. They aren’t right.”

“Yeah, your partner should be human at least.”

“It’s just the way things are going these days.” Flint adjusted his monitor.

“Yeah, everybody thinks the robots are the way to go.”

“But for a partner? It just doesn’t work.”

“I know.”

“Have you seen what they can do?”

“I haven’t looked. I don’t care.”

“I guess one day we’ll all get replaced.”

“Then what will we do?”

“Sit back in luxury?”

“Not likely.”

“Why, what are you going to do?”

“Become a robot repairman. What else will there be?”

“I don’t know.”

“It’s funny though.”

“Yeah?”

“Yeah. It’s funny. You’d think they’d be nothing like us.”

“But they are.”

“I’m not so sure about that, but they’re damn good, and almost everybody is using them for a partner these days.”

“True.”

“How can you talk to a robot though?”

“What do you mean?”

“I’m talking about the little things, or maybe they aren’t so little. Your little girl for instance.”

“What about her?”

“Do you think a robot could relate? Do you think they can understand what it’s like to sit up all night while their wife is in labor, or when a child gets the first tooth? With a robot, I don’t think there can be as clear a connection. You to Be able trust your partner.”

“And to do that you have to know them.”

“And if you don’t know them how can you ever trust? I mean, could you ever put your life in the hands of something made of steel rather than flesh and blood?”

“I don’t know.”

“I guess you never know.”

“Some of the other guys don’t seem to have a problem with it.”

“I’m just not sure.”

Roberts tapped the monitor. “What’s Roman up to in there?”

“Looks like lasagna.”

“There has to be a better way to do a stakeout.”

“I dunno. He’s got to move soon.”

Roberts pushed back in his seat, laying it back. “Got to stretch.”

Flint shifted in his seat and sipped from a safety sealed coffee mug. “I hate these things.” He shook the mug, a feeble dribble of coffee came from the lip. He sipped it from the side as it trickled down.

The screen chirped to life with a crackle.

Roberts sat up and looked forward.

Flint turned the screen, “He’s on the move.”

Roberts gunned the engine and released the claw from the building, bobbing the hovercar down into the pouring rain. “Good deal, it’s about time we got off of this building. Where is he?”

“Looks like he’s heading for the south street.”

“Well, one way or another he’s going down tonight.”

“Don’t jump the gun, he’ll see us too soon.”

“Nobody’s going to see me too early.”

Roberts maneuvered the car into the rain and dived into the streets below. “You got him locked?” asked Roberts.

“Locked and ready.”

“Looks like the car’s navigation is getting a bead on him. Should have a solution in just a moment.”

“I can see him!”

“Where?”

“Just over there, on the other side of that billboard. He’s gone.” The computer beeped and a screen flashed. “We’ve got a solution.”

Roberts looked down at the tangled web of turns and twists and frowned.

“No good?” Flint tapped the controls.

“I’ve got a faster way.”

Roberts veered off to the left, taking a side tunnel between two buildings usually used for garbage pickup, and twisted through a tight passageway.

The computer piped up. “Of route, recalculating.”

Roberts slapped the navigation computer. “Useless.” He switched it off.

“Hey, we need that! It’s tracking him!” Flint switched the machine back on.

“Acquiring satellite.”

“I hate that thing.” Roberts pulled the steering yoke and leveled out the aircar. “There he is.”

Flint looked up. Ahead of them was an aircar, much bigger than theirs and in the style of a limousine. It was lumpy in appearance, smooth around the edges like a large mass of plastic bubbles.

“Target acquired.”

Roberts rolled his eyes at the computer “I think I know that. Flint, can you get a picture in there?”

“Let me try.”

Flint turned knobs on his control panel and twisted dials. A fuzzy picture of Roman came into focus. “I guess robots are useful for something. I’ve tapped into one of their photoreceptors.”

“He’s got robots in there?”

“Yeah, at least five. They seem like standard bodyguard style.”

“That should be interesting.”

Roman’s face appeared on the screen, fading in and out. For a moment his face is clear and the audio of him sharpens. “And that will be the last of them,” he said.

“What’s he planning?” asked Roberts.

“I don’t know.”

“You think he knows he’s being followed?”

“I don’t think so.” The rain beat down upon them. Roman’s limousine was nothing but a wash of color in front of them trailing red brake lights.

Lighting streaked across the sky. It flashed right in front of them. Roman pulled to the right “Whoa.” they spun around, and then straightened up.

Roberts looked around, “Where did he go?”

Flint shook his head and blinked, rubbing his eyes to return his vision. Blue patches hung before his eyes in streaks. “Dammit!”

Roberts flung out a pointing finger. “There!” he turned the aircar and dived down into the sub-streets below the city. Under levels of old physical streets and bridges, the rain lessened, only pouring in around them as the bridges and streets above them permitted. It created a kind of a stained glass effect around them distorting lights and movements.

The computer came to life tracing their flight in three dimensions as they careened through the water. Warning lights blared and alarms whistled.

“You’re too close to the wall.” Flint hung onto the dashboard.

“We’ve almost got him.”

“I am too old for this…”

“No you’re not, you’re only ninety-six.”

“What’s your point?”

“You’re not too old. Hell, I’m only a hundred and two.” Roberts turned the wheel and followed Roman’s limousine down through a circular tunnel. “I agree we’re not in our fifties anymore, but it’s not like it’s time for a mid-life crisis or anything.”

Flint ignored him. Medical technology had come a long way since he was a child, that was true, but he wasn’t sure that they were in quite that good of condition. He checked his badge and the power on his laser pistol.

Roberts flipped the ship upside down, slinging it through a series of pipes, barely missing an electrified laser gate.

“I don’t know about you Roberts, but I’m looking at seventy years on the force, and I still can’t seem to get enough together to retire.”

“You’re ready to retire?”

“I didn’t say that!”

“It’s what I thought I heard.”

“It’s just that seventy years of anything gets old after a while.”

“You mean like being partnered with me?”

“That’s not what I said.”

“Maybe you want one of those new robotic partners. That way you could pop in another personality cartridge anytime you got bored with them.”

“Lett’s just drop it.”

“I think you’re just tired of me!”

“Jeff!”

Roberts stopped. It had been at least thirteen years since he’d heard his own first name, and it stopped him for a moment. He wasn’t really sure how long it had been.

“What?”

“Drop it. We’re almost on Roman. Let’s bring him in, then we can duke this out later.”

“Agreed.”

“Look, there he goes.”

Roman’s limousine plunged into a series of underground caves. Roberts followed him, keeping close to the ceiling of the cave, and inverted, so they could look down at Roman’s limousine from above.

“He’s stopping, activate the cloak.”

Flint hit a switch on his panel and the car’s hull shimmered, and then appeared as if it were a part of the cave ceiling. They clamped onto the roof of the cave and powered down the ship.

Below them, The doors of Roman’s limousine opened and out stepped five robot bodyguards. They formed a line, and Roman exited the vehicle, walked past them, and through a small door. The robots followed him, and soon the limousine took flight and went down a small corridor. All was dark, save for the dripping of water from the cave ceiling.

Roberts and Flint opened the canopy of the aircar, and seat belts in place, they did not fall to their deaths. Instead, they each reached for a small latch at their side and hooked into it, then, releasing their belts, they rode a thin strong cable to the floor a hundred feet below. Twisting like bored acrobats, they touched down on the ground like it was second nature to them. They released the lines which slid neatly back up to their ship. Flint pulled a remote control from his belt and punched a button on it causing the canopy on the ship to close. The cloaking unit still activated, it blended into the ceiling and disappeared.

Roberts checked his laser pistol’s power level and tucked it away. “Ready?”

“I always am.”

They pushed through the door and found themselves in a dank corridor. Lights flickered around them, and drips from the ceiling penetrated their clothes and slipped in through gaps at their neck and wrists.

“They can’t be much farther up now. Why do you suppose they would come all this way?”

“Not sure. It can’t be for a good reason though, and what about all those robot guards?”

“How many are there?”

“Five.”

“That seems like a lot of firepower.”

“For anything except a massacre, yes, I suppose you’re right.”

Roberts smiled. “I haven’t been on a bust this big for a while.”

“Feels good doesn’t it?”

The tunnels twisted and turned. Flint opened a small device latched into his wrist, and checked to mark the progress of the guard robots he was tracking. “They’re not far off.”

“No, they can’t be.”

“It’s got to be right up there.”

Ahead of them was a door with a frosted window. Lights danced and shimmered across it as if from a great bonfire in the distance. They could smell the smoke in the back of their throats. The air began to feel warmer.

Flint loosened his cuffs.

Roberts shook his head and adjusted a visor over his eyes. It gave him a thermal readout of the scene ahead of him.

The door was warm to the touch. It blinded Roberts’s thermal relay, and he discarded it for a moment. It was warm, but not hot, it was possible.

“You ready?”

“Let’s get in there.”

They cracked the door and saw no one except a guard robot on the inside. It noticed them, and Roberts took it down so fast it never had a chance to send a relay message.

Roberts swung up and connected with the robot’s power pack, which every cop worth a paying wage knew about. It confused the robot long enough for him to pull the power, and then carefully lay the robot on the ground.

Flint knew his part in all of this, he pried open the robot’s chest plate, and dug his hands into the wires, cutting some, and twisting others, until he pulled enough of them away to get to the central hub of sensory input. He plugged in a small round device that he pulled from an inside pocket. When it connected a small green light lit up. He was in. Within seconds the chest plate was back in place, and they were hoisting the robot back onto its feet.

“You get the memory circuits?” asked Roberts.

“Not only will it not remember us, but it’s programmed to never remember seeing or hearing us in the future.”

The robot stood up and returned to its post, looking right past them. The two old men, still appearing roughly in their forties despite their real age looked over a short ledge behind the robot, with the robot’s eyes feeding into their visors.

Below them, a large bonfire lit the room. Around it stood a variety of crooks and thugs. Most of them looked like ordinary folks, and others looked like more high-profile bounty hunters and some of them looked like they were made of money and bad intentions drove their daily use of it. Roman stood at the head of the group, pacing in front of them.

Roman cleared his throat. “It seems gentlemen that this town is not long from ours. It seems to me that given just the right leverage and use of our tools and talents that we could run this town to the betterment of us all. We are useful, talented, devious people in desperate need of making a living aren’t we?”

The thugs and bounty hunters watched him with their arms folded. Some nodded. Flint watched them in his visor. It looked like they were still deciding whether or not to take the bait or turn on Roman. Roman continued to pace.

“Are there any questions?” Roman asked.

One of the thugs raised his hand.

“Yes?”

“Well, What about the robot cops?”

“What about them?”

“They are getting harder and harder to avoid.”

“The robotic cops are of no concern. They are no more than bodyguard partners for the few remaining cops that they have left to work the streets for real. They are not a threat. If anything we should thank them for spreading the local police departments as thin as they have done. Anyone else?”

“What about our bodyguard robots?”

“They are as useful as they can be, but remember that a human mind is always more devious and devilish than the robots can ever be. It’s why they are such a bad idea in the first place. The robots can only think a certain way. They don’t learn, it’s hard to program them, and the efforts to make them easy to talk to have failed miserably. There’s nothing for it. Besides, they are easy to control.”

One of the Bounty hunters spoke up. “What do you mean?”

“Here, watch,” said Roman. He pulled a smartphone from his pocket flicked his fingers across the screen, and from behind a concealed door next to him stepped an R-COP 5000. It was a slender beast, armed to the teeth with hidden weapons. Roman snapped his fingers and the robot came to attention. It stood there, a vague assemblage of parts that represented a cross between a fiberglass crash test dummy, a fashion mannequin and a work of art blown in glass. “I call him Manny.”

Roman snapped his fingers again. “Manny, show us what you’ve got.”

The Robot seemed to smile, gesturing its head in an inclination to Roman. It held up its left and right arms, and with a twitch of its elbows, two pistols appeared in its hands from hidden compartments. He showered the ceiling in bullets, then as quick as thinking he flicked his arms and the guns were gone and replaced with two flat steel blades. He sliced through the air and twirled around stopping to pause menacingly in front of one of the thugs in the front row.

“You see,” Roman gestured toward the robot. I can even make them harm themselves. He snapped his fingers again, and pressing a button on his phone, the robot looked at him with the sense of disdain, and then calmly stepped into the fire.

Next to them, standing near where Roberts and Flint were hunched down, the guard robot they had commandeered popped, and fell over, crumbling to the ground. Everyone in the hall looked up at the disturbance.

At their feet, the robot seemed to crackle with electricity. “They’ve rigged it. I should have known.” Flint looked at the smoking robot. It jerked and then really exploded sending shrapnel in every direction. Flint and Roberts ducked and the shower of parts and sparks flew over them.

Down in the hall, Roman scowled. “Cops.” He flipped a switch on his phone, and the R-COP 5000 jumped from the bonfire, landing on the ledge overlooking where Roberts and Flint had been just a moment before.

The door behind Flint and Roberts burst open, and the R-COP 5000 stormed through it.

Flint breathed heavily as he ran. “That’s the latest model, I think.”

“I think it is too.” Roberts pulled a compact device from his belt.

“If they can already control them…”

“We might be in a lot of trouble.” Roberts activated a small device, a bomb, and threw it behind him as they ran. It clicked onto the robot’s chest and stuck there, magnetized.

“Hell, we might all be in a lot of trouble.”

The robot stopped in the hall, and pulled the device from its chest and examined it about the time that a small blinking green light on its surface turned red and it exploded, taking most of the robot with it. For just a few moments the two of them were alone in the hall with the R-COP’s legs and pelvis, which took a second or two longer to fall to the ground, running without a torso for a few additional moments. A second later the eyes in the robot’s disembodied head went out.

A second after that Roman, leading a small army of thugs were right behind them.

Roberts and Flint stepped into an old elevator shaft, and pulled cords from their belts and pointed them up the tunnel, shooting razor cords into the darkness. They struck rock, grabbed on and the two of them shot up into the darkness, leaving the thugs behind them.

They discarded the cords and ran down the tunnel. They could both hear their pursuers behind them and still gaining, though hindered by the old elevator shaft.

They ducked around behind a series of overturned crates. The metal grinding of the bodyguard robot’s legs passed them by, followed by Roman, who slowed to a walk in the wake of them, and stood calmly as they continued on up through the underground passageways into the night.

Roman stood there. When he turned around to make his way back down to the meeting area, he saw them. Both Flint and Roberts stood, guns raised, and poised to strike. Roman walked up to them and stood there, his hands outstretched.

Flint bound his hands while Roberts searched him, pulling the robot controller from his pocket.

“What’s this?”

“It not illegal to own.”

“We’ll see about that Roman.” Flint pushed Roman into the wall and roughed him up, punching him in the stomach.

Roman remained very calm after expelling a forced cough from the impact. “You two don’t have a chance.”

Flint ignored him and pushed Roman forward. “Officer Roberts?”

“Shall I read him his rights?”

“You know I rather think not.”

Flint pushed Roman forward, to the edge of an elevator shaft.

“What are you doing?” Roman asked.

“Making something clear,” said Flint.

“Oh, I think everything is quite clear.”

“And how’s that Roman?”

“You are going to threaten my life.”

“Yes.”

“And then you are going to try and force me to divulge information.”

“Without?”

“Without any regard for my personal safety or the fact that I’m going to kill both of you before you have the chance to do anything of the kind.”

“You are a dog.”

“And you are a Cop. Sorry, that’s the worst that I can come up with at the moment.”

“Okay smart-ass…”

Flint plunged Roman toward the elevator shaft, keeping hold of his neck, and jerked him back. Roman yelled, but it was more out of surprise than anything else. He began to laugh. In the distance, there was a silent grinding buzzing in their ears.

Flint shook Roman, who stopped laughing and looked him right in the face. “You think I don’t know you’ve been following me for a month and a half?”

Flint let him go. It wasn’t voluntary.

“Yes, it’s true.” Roman brushed off his coat and readjusted himself. “You and your partner here are going to have to get with the rest of the century. The robots are the way of the future. Everything revolves around them these days. It’s inevitable. You’ll all be replaced, and I’ll own this town!”

“Is that what you think?”

“Isn’t it obvious? The constant inclusion of robotic technology, the way they do everything for you now, the way they clean your cars, take care of your food, shine your shoes, take your dogs out for a walk. Now with ninety percent of the police force dependent on them, trusting robotic partners who can be hacked by satellite at a moment’s notice and turn on you in an instant doesn’t work!”

Roberts stepped up and slapped Roman hard. Roman stepped back and nearly fell down the elevator shaft.

“Now that wasn’t any good at all.”

“What are you going to do about it?”

“This.”

Blaster fire rang out behind them. Flint ducked for cover, but Roberts wasn’t so lucky. The shots were all aimed for him in the first place, presumably, they would target Flint in a moment and he had to act fast. Robert’s body flailed, the very gunfire itself holding him up and in place until he came to rest on the ground a mile below the surface world where the torrents of rain had been reduced to the mildest trickle.

Four of the bodyguard robots had returned, realizing that their owner and operator was no longer with them.

Flint rolled back and tossed an electrified bomb into their midst. Its fuse was short. Flint ducked for cover and the bomb exploded sending electronic shrapnel in all directions. The robots shorted out and fell to the ground. It wasn’t a terribly good solution, best for buying some time at least though. He popped up; gun trained on Roman, and cocked the firing mechanism. “I think a short walk Roman,” he said.

Roman complied, but with an expression of boredom firmly locked on his face.

Flint opened a panel on his uniform and allowed three small floating robots to hover about the scene taking pictures and photographs of the crime scene. One of them dived down and permanently dismantled the robots, and another took finger, skin, blood and hair samples from everyone in the vicinity.

Flint took Roman and pushed him forward. “Let’s go. I’m going to have to add murder to your current list then.” within moments another series of robots were on the scene to clean up. They took away the dismantled robot bodies and the remains of officer Roberts. Flint stood by and watched as they took away his partner. He jabbed Roman in the back as they took him away, and wondered vaguely if this meant the end of his career or if he was going to be saddled with one of the new robotic partners like Roman was talking about.

He pushed Roman forward and walked back to the aircar. He pressed his remote control. The ship’s cloaking device cleared and the ship lowered to pick them up.

Flint shoved Roman into the back, a compartment saved for the scum of the Earth, and took off.

“It was bound to happen,” said Roman.

“Shut up.”

“I mean, as dependent as you are these days on robotic technology…”

Flint twitched and bit his lip. “I’ll make you pay for this.”

“Pay… whatever for…”

Flint punched the Plexiglas that separated them.

Roman jumped back from the impact, but then laughed from the release of tension.

“You haven’t got a clue.”

Flint arrived at the funeral late. The wind was blowing. All of their carefully combed and color-treated hair of those there looked like wild and wooly messes atop all of their heads.

Flint stood on a small rise not too far from what was left of the cemetery. Built-in an upward spiral toward the real sky, here the dearly departed lived in concrete graves surrounded by Astroturf and circular, spiraling ceilings of blue and daylight bulbs. The wind was real as they were close to the cemetery’s apex.

A holy man, dressed in black, finished some words over the body, but they never penetrated Flint’s heart. They were lost in the wind, less than real to him. What was real was the realization that he was alone. For the first time in forty years, he was alone. Had he missed having a family? In his nineties, he was still virile, and strong. Medicine was still on an upward spiral, and the human life span hadn’t been properly measured in some time. He laughed but it was more out of nervousness.

What was the solution? What would happen when he returned to the force? What about the extra desk that was now in his office? Once his partner’s, would it become dusty, left there like the remains of a legend like in those old movies after a detective loses his partner? Would he be able to survive this at all? It had been a long time since he had been saddled with the old man. Would they just downsize him? What about robots? The new robot partners, that was definitely a thought. Certainly, they wouldn’t saddle him with one of those. Hell, one was practically responsible for what happened.

He watched. Holy words had been finished while he was thinking, and people were beginning to break up. Dianne brushed past him, Roberts’s wife, she was beautiful, but he did not speak.

“Flint,” she said.

“He’s gone for good, isn’t he?”

“Yep.”

There was kindness in her eyes, and perhaps a string of bitterness as well as sorrow, but something seemed to soften it for Flint as he stood there in front of her.

She took him in her arms and hugged him.

“I’ll get these guys.”

“You already have.”

He looked into her eyes.

“Didn’t you hear? Roman’s dead.”

“When?”

“It was last night. The shower room. We’ll never have to worry about him again.”

Flint breathed. It was like he’d been holding it for about an hour straight. The color seemed to come back into his face.

“What I’m worried about, is you,” she said.

“I’ll be fine.”

“I know you will. Still, sometimes it pays to be thoughtful. Do you know what you’ll do?”

“I want to stay with the force. It’s all I really have.”

“Don’t forget you have me.”

She kissed his cheek and took her to leave.

Chief Parkers were next in line. A gruff man with flat hair, a flatter nose, and the flattest gray eyes known to man, he towered above Flint, who was starting to tremble.

“It’s all too real, Chief.”

“I know son, It really is.” He gestured around them. “All this, the loss of a partner, it’s the scariest thing a cop can face in this day and age. Of course, pretty soon there won’t be any more partners to lose.”

“You mean human partners.”

“Of course. That’s what I mean.”

“How many are left?”

“A dozen or so, worldwide.”

“Just that many?”

“Yes. It’s an interesting phenomenon. I still remember my first partner. But that’s all in the past now.”

“In the past.” Flint thought about it for a moment. In the past… What was the future? What would it hold?

“Naturally you’ve been wondering, I suppose, how it was all going to go down after the dust settled.”

Flint couldn’t believe he was getting a job evaluation at his partner’s funeral. He clenched his fists and bit his lip.

The Chief persisted, “It just seems to me that you are too valuable to the force to let go at this time, of course, a retirement is an option, and no one would think any the less of you. You’ve had a long career.”

“If I stay?”

“First thing you’ll need is a new partner, then we can start getting you an assignment or two, get you back in the saddle, so-to-speak.”

“About the partner… I…”

“No need to worry yourself, you’ll have the best we can give you, though getting used to having a robot can be an interesting fiasco if you’re not up to it.

“What if I refuse the partner, want to go it alone?”

“No chance. Our robots have gotten our cops out of so many scrapes, it’s just not advisable. Besides they are basically walking computers at any rate. You’re used to those.”

“Yes, but…”

“Not another word. If I have to instruct you to treat this as an order, then I’ll do so. You really have no idea what these guys are like. Pretty soon you’ll wonder how you got along without one.”

“I can’t wait.”

“Good, we’ll see you bright and early at the proving grounds. It’s going to take some time to get used to this and believe me, we understand.”

“I’ll be there.”

Getting started again

How do you make a journal enjoyable? I mean, most of what I want to do is write science fiction. So, why am I writing this journal if I am writing science fiction? I suppose it comes down to wanting to get words on paper. I have a fairly clever idea, but I am balancing the forces of going by the seat of my pants and detailed outlines because I know that detailed outlines break down for me. Quickly. But I also know that they help me get started. So, I do not know where the balance lies. I have gotten a fairly promising idea; it’s a cyberpunk-ish idea. Um, but I do not know, I think it might be fun. I wonder sometimes if it is a little too much like. Uh, the old Max Headroom show. But you know, I do not know. Certain aspects show that. Inspire me, but I do not know. You can take Max’s Headroom. Then, take some Blade Runner and put it in the blender. It might be interesting. I am also wondering if there needs to be a supernatural element to it. That would throw things off in a cyberpunk setting.

So, what are the interesting things about going by the seat of your pants? Well, um. I suppose Stephen King does it. Uh, he starts the story with an interesting idea, lets it flow from one page to the next, and never looks back until the book is done. It is interesting that you can go by the seat of your pants. And. it is interesting that you can go by the seat of your pants and still know when your story is over or plan for it to be over in three months. Or however long it takes to write something. Dean Koontz says that he. Oh, right, from 9:00 in the morning until 5:00 at night and in the afternoon. I am unsure I can keep that pace up, but I do not know; I might. It has been a little while since. Oh, it has been a little while since I got a draft written. But it has not been that long. Uh, I have been doing plenty of editing. Uh, you know, it is time for me to get started on a new composition. I am tempted, strangely enough, to fight by the seat of my pants in the morning. Then, follow that up with 1,000 words in an outlined story. I do not know if that would work. Umm. I do not know whether it would drive me up the wall to work on two things or if it would. If one would benefit from the other or end up being a part of the same story, what would happen with all that text? Is it worth a try? I am not sure.

What would you do? If you were starting a new story, there are so many choices. I mean when you’re. Drafting a story that you could, you know, first person, second person. Uh. A part of me would like to author an entire book in the second person, but I’m not writing Choose Your Own Adventures, so that’s probably not going to happen. Um, I still know a story. There are three parts: the first is in the first person, the second is in the second person, and the third is in the third person. I might put that book together eventually. Um. I am also trying to ensure I get some journal going. Hmm, and that I publish more often on my website than I do. Uh, it is not something that I do. I have a problem with it. Well, that is not true. I have a problem with it. Uh, I have a. I get to. I get into a rut. And uh. I’ll go for months and not actually publish anything on the website, but there is a part of me that would like to write a kind of informal things and get them up, and there’s also a part of me that would like to straight up post, uh, pages from. Ah, my books. And. Um, that part scares me because, uh, you know, I want people to buy the books. But sometimes you must put in your work. Out for free. Just to let people know who you are. So, I am working on that. Will I publish some of my pages? And how many? Of them, and for what reason? I am still working all that out.

“The Parting of the Ways,” Doctor Who, Season 1, Episode 13 (2 of 2)

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So, it’s been a long time. I have to say that this particular entry is not my favorite thing in the world. It will not be normal. And it will be the last of these kinds of summaries. I found that you know, I’m not alone. Many of these websites give summaries of science fiction shows, and I’m just not going to keep up with any of them. The truth is that I’m doing a terrible job keeping up and doing a lot of avoiding it. So I started thinking about why I was doing that, and what was coming up in my field of vision was that I was no longer working on the daily output of any story. This terrified me. It was apparent to me that I had lost focus, and that I was completely working on the wrong thing. So that’s what I’m here to say.

I could talk about this episode of Doctor Who, where I go through all of the events and show the structure, but I’ve got to break this off I got to break this entire thing off so that I can get on with some new stuff. I think that there is room for blog entries and there is room for short things to go in here and I’m still working that out in my brain. But you know a Doctor Who saves the day And Rose Tyler gets back and helps destroy the doll looks for the power that doesn’t make sense and will never be used again and everybody you know runs off, and then we get a regeneration. I know there’s a lot of controversy over the actor’s desire to leave the show after the season. I think, for different reasons, that just in case they only got this one, what they wanted was everything that you could do in Doctor Who to get done in this season. But that’s about all I want to say about the actual show.

I got a lot of things going on in my brain, been sick, there’s been a lot of personal drama and tragedy around here, currently, we’ve got family up from Florida who were escaping hurricane Milton and I’m trying to kickstart my writing again in a meaningful way. I have this concept and it’s a little weird. It’s one of those things that I’ve always wanted to try but for one reason or another I had other things to do and it just didn’t work out. So I want to put some effort into it and see what happens if I try to do it. I did not want to lose study courses where you get access to a writer. It was with RL Stine who had a really good writing course and it kind of inspired me I like the idea of maybe doing a similar series where I write short fiction for kids, but I like the idea of doing it under a pseudonym. I don’t intend to hide my pseudonym, but I do intend to have fun with it. I named it after a character in another book that I haven’t released yet who is a writer who can make things happen in life when he writes them named Evolution Gray.

My great-niece is in the house and my cat has no idea what to do about it. She had never seen a creature so small that could walk on two legs, and it was fun to watch her and I mean the kitty run from the small child. It’s like well what the heck is that? I’m taking that as my clue to leave this entry behind for good, along with the entire series get on with some useful writing.

“Bad Wolf,” Doctor Who, Season 1, Episode 12 (1 of 2)

This show’s entry follows the style of Dan Harmon’s story circle.

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Bad Wolf

What RTD does in this episode is dastardly. He has his big bad evil villains attacking the human race with weaponized reality TV!

1) In a zone of comfort

The Doctor, Rose, and Jack begin this episode captured and beamed into separate holding areas. To begin with, everyone is very confused. They don’t know where they are and they don’t understand what’s going on. They do however start to recognize certain familiar aspects of where they are.

The Doctor finds himself locked in a house with several other housemates who appear to be on a reality television show of some format. After investigating, the Doctor figures out that he is on a twisted version of the television show Big Brother, a reality show where housemates vote each other off until only one is left, except this time if someone leaves the house, they call it being evicted, and they are killed.

Rose finds herself on another show, a game show called The Weakest Link that was also very popular at the same time this 2006 episode aired. It’s a similar show in that contestants are eliminated until there’s only one left, however this time they are destroyed instead of simply leaving the show. The robotic host with a laser in her mouth, is a parody of the original host of the actual show.

Jack finds himself in a completely different show based on another popular reality television show called What Not to Wear. Similar to the situation in which Rose finds herself, Jack is faced with robotic versions of the hosts of the original show. They are there to give him a makeover which is something Jack would be into, until it all goes wrong and the chainsaws come out.

Hardly a zone of comfort I know, but it is how we start the show.

2) They desire something

They all want to escape, except Jack at first, who seems to be enjoying it too much. Each of them searches for their way out, some in more dire shape than the others.

3) Enter an unfamiliar situation

Faced with this unfamiliar situation, each of them works to figure out where they are. The Doctor does his best to get in trouble so he’ll be kicked out, while Rose gets cornered and put on stage and forced to play the quiz show. In the beginning, she doesn’t take it seriously, until people start to die.

4) Adapt to the situation

Rose works her way through, trying to adapt as best she can to what’s going on, and takes on the other contestants on the show, including one who seems to have it in for her. Jack gets the jump on his captors, pulling a gun from “somewhere,” and escaping right when the two robots think they’ve got him completely cornered. The Doctor, who has made a new friend Lynda (with a Y) escapes the show after becoming evicted. He’s broken one of the cameras with his sonic screwdriver and he invites Lynda to go with him. The Doctor is falling into some old habits here and we get a very similar shot to the one at the beginning of the first episode of this season, where the Doctor holds his hand out to Linda just as he did to Rose as he invites her to come with him. He is endangering her, even though she is interested in following him. The Doctor has a few things to learn from Lynda. He’s gotta be a whole lot more careful in the future with who he takes with him. Up ahead are some hard lessons for him to learn.

5) Get what they desired

The Doctor gets out and finds out he’s too important to someone to kill. (which seems to happen to him a lot.) He offers a hand to Lynda. In the back of his mind, he’s picking up a new companion, but what she is, is a warning about Rose’s future. Traveling with the Doctor can be seriously deadly.

6) Pay a heavy price for winning

Linda shows the Doctor the observation deck where they can see the Earth, and the Doctor sees that it looks incredibly wrong to him. The last time he was here on Satellite Five, he thought he’d put everything right again. But this was much much worse, and Linda tells him that it happened right after the time he was there before. Did he cause this new problem? Did he make it worse? The Doctor begins to doubt himself and wonder if he is doing good in the galaxy. The Doctor begins to get a little panicky. Jack then busts out and finds the Doctor and Lynda. Together, they locate Rose but arrive too late.

Rose is killed. (Though not truly.)

Losing a companion is the Doctor’s worst nightmare. He just saw Rose destroyed in front of his eyes in a blast of laser light. He is responsible, he’ll have to go tell Jackie. He is beside himself and loses all hope. He and Jack are arrested and taken to a holding cell. When the Doctor has had enough and sees the opportunity, he embraces Jack’s darker side and they assault the guards and escape. The Doctor is now on a holy quest to find out who is behind all of this, to find someone else to blame for the death of Rose and he’s not playing around anymore.

7) Return to their familiar situation

In this case for this episode, returning to a familiar situation is uncertain. It is the first of a two-parter so there is no complete resolution. There is one thing that does return the Doctor to a familiar situation. What it does is reintroduce a major villain. RTD had been holding them back, and keeping them in the shadows, but the controller of the station sacrifices herself to expose them, after having done what she can to bring the Doctor and his companions here to face them.

What appears before him on the screen are the Daleks, and they have Rose.

8) They have overall changed

The Doctor lays it all out, practically dedicating his love to Rose in a statement where he has no plan but he is going to defeat the Daleks and blast every one of them out of the sky after he gets on that ship and saves Rose. The Doctor has put away all pretense of trying to hide his love for this incredibly young girl who has stolen his heart.

Maybe she has stolen both of them.

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“Boom Town,” Doctor Who, Season 1, Episode 11

This show’s entry follows the style of Dan Harmon’s story circle.

Dan Harmon's story circle

Boom Town

1) In a zone of comfort

The Doctor and Rose return to Cardiff to refuel the TARDIS on top of the rift they established in a previous episode. Mickey arrives by train, called in by Rose to give it another shot. Jack is there, and he and the Doctor have fun poking Mickey. Everything is going well and everybody seems nice and comfortable until the Doctor notices a newspaper across the room that shows one of their old Slitheen buddies is operating again in town and the political spectrum.

2) They desire something

The Doctor wants to find out what she’s up to and stop her, which is pretty much what he always wants and desires during one of these episodes. What Margaret wants though, is a different story. She wants the ultimate thing that many space-traveling people who have grown weary want. She wants to go home. She’s indeed trying to avoid her responsibilities at home but you can tell that she is homesick for something and of course, as a villain what she decides to do endangers a whole lot of people to get what she wants. The difference here is that she’s on her own now and trying to operate on her own and she’s running out of resources. The Doctor has a whole lot of that on her, so as she runs out of resources he catches up with her pretty quickly. Margaret wants to destroy Cardiff, and by extension the entire world because of course it is Doctor Who and destroy a new nuclear power plant to ride the explosion away from this planet.

3) Enter an unfamiliar situation

Margaret is captured quickly. There’s a lot of business about bad Wolf and what that means in this episode, but that’s not what the real point is about here. She’s captured and brought aboard the TARDIS, which of course gives her other ideas. The Doctor will return to her home, even if it is a death sentence. None of the TARDIS crew feel good about this, and none of them can look her in the eye although they all believe it’s the right thing to do. This is new territory for the Doctor. There’s a certain amount of mercy involved and he can take mercy on someone who has tried to destroy the world over and over again, and can he feel sorry for her and do the right thing of course there’s a combination of both those things going on at this in this episode.

4) Adapt to the situation

The Doctor does something that he is not used to doing. He grants her last request, a final meal so to speak. She tries to kill him two or three times during the meal, but he’s not unprepared for that. This to me, this marks a certain turning point in the Doctor’s development. Before he was always someone who would defeat the enemies no matter what and there was no gray area involved but he’s taking a second look is Margaret as bad as she says she is or is she just trying to survive which of course is something that he’s trying to do. She’s a renegade and yet homesick and so is he and he would like to do nothing better than to help her and give her another chance but he doesn’t know how.

This interaction is incredibly interesting to me because I think it will set up the kind of Doctor he will be in the future, someone who cares a lot more about his enemies than he lets on. Eventually, way down the line in the 12th Doctor’s era, I will see him return and visit Davros, the old creator of the Daleks because he was sick, and he asked the Doctor to come. We are moving into an era where the Doctor wants to help everybody not just the people who are the victims, but also the villains.

5) Get what they desired

The confrontation inside the TARDIS. Margaret has smuggled in a trans diamond channel surfboard of sorts, and we get our first view inside the heart of the TARDIS. It’s that bright subtle light that transfixes his people, and it’s a setup for what we’re going to see in the parting of the ways in a few episodes, but it provides two things. It provides the Doctor’s means of defeating someone that he doesn’t want to vanquish personally and provides Margaret a way out except it doesn’t quite turn out that way.

6) Pay a heavy price for winning

Margaret both loses her life and gets to start over. The TARDIS returns her to the form of an egg. It’s a hairy squiggly-looking egg, but it’s an egg.

7) Return to their familiar situation

The crew is off to return Margaret to her home, but now they’ve come out different.

8) They have overall changed

The Doctor will question from now on how far he needs to go. Ultimate destruction is not always the right choice. He will falter, but every time he goes too far he always remembers, that sometimes everyone, even he, deserves a second chance.

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The Shack, by William Paul Young

The Shack by William Paul Young

My rating: 4 of 5 stars


Look, you should read The Shack. I can’t say anymore, well that’s not true, there are a ton of things I can say about The Shack, but the main thing I’m going to say about it is that you should read it. It is not the best narrative I’ve ever seen in the world, but it depicts sort of the three faces of God, the Holy Trinity if you will, in such an interesting manner that it’s worth taking a look at. If you are kind of an armchair Christian who has never contemplated what it means for Jesus to absolve us of our sin beyond a simple understanding, and you’re still sitting around thinking that we are all doomed to hell and that our spiritual rebirth is not assured then you need to read The Shack, and you need to hear how they treat Mac as he suffers while coming to terms with the murder of his young child. He’s going through some serious grief, and it is not completely unlike some of the torture that we put ourselves through in general when terrible things happen. You can see his relationship develop with God in the form of Jesus and the Holy Spirit in addition to “Papa” which is an interesting way to to talk about the third aspect of the Holy Trinity.

The first I would say 20%, is rough and by the time you are getting to the shack and aspects of God are beginning to appear, it’s still rough and bleak. He’s going through his child being killed by a serial murderer and then coming to terms with his own belief in God while he’s there. In the early stages, you want to throw the book away. But if you can get through that, especially on audio, then you will take away a great perspective on perhaps how Jesus God, and the Holy Spirit may think of us.

If a book, especially one written as fiction can make you feel the love of God, this might be it.



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“The Doctor Dances,” Doctor Who, Season 1, Episode 10 (2 of 2)

This show’s entry follows the style of Dan Harmon’s story circle.

Dan Harmon's story circle

Just this once. Everybody lives!

The Doctor Dances

Much like the last one of these, this is part two. The Doctor Dances culminates the story of the Doctor and Rose visiting the London Blitz. We’ve already covered parts one through four, so here are five, six, seven, and eight. Dr. Constantine has just turned into a zombie, Rose and Jack have found the Doctor at the hospital, and the children have surrounded them. Then the Doctor does something very interesting, taking advantage of how the child will probably think. He sends him to his room. It’s a saving grace in a kind of a great way to get out of being cornered by all the children but backfires on them later.

5) Get what they desired

Essentially, Rose gets what she desires, in that she gets the Doctor alone. They’re trapped, or at least eventually they become trapped, and it’s pretty early in the episode. The children are bearing down on them. Jack has escaped with the teleporting device back to his ship. The Doctor and Rose believe him to have left for good, but then the radio plays. Jack is taking control of it. He’s playing his old radio tunes, and Rose takes this moment to put the screws to the Doctor and corner him. The Doctor makes up a bullshit reason about resonating concrete to affect their escape, but Rose isn’t buying it. She already knows that Jack’s on his way because of the radio, so she takes over the conversation and pushes him. Does the Doctor dance? Obviously to us what they’re talking about is sex, or at the very least, romantic relationships.

Yes, he does. We all know he started off this journey with his granddaughter in the first show, so he has family. And since you know, granddaughter, he’s done plenty of dancing in his time. You get the idea, that the Doctor has not done this for some time. There’s a long-standing belief, that the Doctor should not have any kind of relationship with the people that travel with him. Some believe this to be the best. This is supposed to be a family show, and it’s supposed to be partly about looking into the past and looking ahead at the future. But I think that shorts our lead character to a certain extent. I think there needs to be room for these kinds of relationships, especially for a lead. One thing about Doctor Who is that to a certain extent, he has never been the lead, at least he wasn’t the lead directly until much later in the original series. It was almost as if the companions were the leads because we were seeing everything through their eyes. I think it gives the show a chance to grow up. If the Doctor can have these kinds of relationships, then this is no longer just a children’s show. Now this becomes an adult science fiction drama. Still family-friendly, just now with “dating and dancing.”

I believe that he’s had relationships with multiple companions over the years. For instance, I believe that Jo Grant and Sarah Jane were sexual partners of the Doctor, and I think Teagan Jovanka was also a sexual partner of the Doctor. Romana? Debatable, especially since Tom Baker and Lalla Ward had a “Hollywood” wedding. These are people he had trouble leaving when the time came. In Teagan’s case, she’s the only one in the original series that the Doctor chased after and asked not to leave.

At this moment, however, the Doctor gives in. He’s been harboring feelings for Rose the entire time but hasn’t been able to bring himself to broach the subject. Rose now does the work for him, which is a relief. By the end of the episode, you can tell that they are accepting the possibility that they are a couple rather than spending all their time telling people they’re not.

6) Pay a heavy price for winning

The person who ends up bearing the heavy load in this episode and pays the heavy price for winning is Nancy. The way to beat the aliens and bring everyone back is for Nancy to own up to the fact that the boy, Jamie, is hers. She’s been hiding the fact of her teen pregnancy for so long that it’s been wearing on her, body and soul. She’s poured all of her nervous energy into helping all the children that she can because she couldn’t face the fact that she had one that she needed to be taking care of herself. She’d been acting as his sister, but that didn’t change the fact that she was his mom. It’s that big mom’s love coming through that saves the day. The Doctor was there and Jack got rid of the bomb, but what did the work was Nancy taking over officially as Jamie’s mom.

7) Return to their familiar situation

The Doctor and Rose, get back to the TARDIS and Rose pushes the Doctor to save Jack. The Doctor was already going to do it; I think. I think he wanted a couple of extra tender moments to himself with Rose before he did it.

8) They have overall changed

This episode marks not only a change in the Doctor and Rose and their relationship, but it’s a fundamental shift in the entire show. In the space of these two episodes, Russell T Davies has shown that the Doctor can have and maintain an adult relationship while inside the framework of a show that remains friendly to families. There is room for innuendo and room boogie while keeping the show heading in a direction that works for its intended audience.

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“The Empty Child,” Doctor Who, Season 1, Episode 9 (1 of 2)

The Empty Child

This show’s entry follows the style of Dan Harmon’s story circle.

Dan Harmon's story circle

“Gimmie some Spock! Would it kill you?”

I think it’s impossible to tell the story of “The Empty Child” and “The Doctor Dances” without splitting up the standard steps. Since this episode ends in a massive cliffhanger, it’s important to see that you can’t possibly close the circuit and have anybody return to their familiar situation without the second part and conclusion to this story. So that’s what I’m going to do. In this entry, I’m going to go through steps one through four, as if this were all one big story and then I’m going to pick it up in the next entry with the second half and wrap it up.

1) In a zone of comfort

In this story, I think that the zone of comfort is the Doctor doing what the Doctor does. Rose is desperate. Maybe desperate is not exactly the right word, but she wants his attention. He impresses her; she thinks she’s hot, and she doesn’t understand why he won’t make a move on her. He’s going around, saving the world or saving the universe or saving whatever it is he’s saving at the moment and Rose doesn’t understand. She’s right there. The big lug doesn’t seem to catch a hint. She even begs him on the way out of the TARDIS when they’re looking for the cause of of their search, the space ambulance, she says “Gimmie some Spock! Would it kill you?” She’s pushing his buttons, seeing if she can crack his shell and see if sex (dancing!) is a possibility with him.

2) They desire something

So Rose lays it out for him. She wants some flash. She wants him to show off gizmos. She wants him to sweep her off her feet, and not just be the hero she’s looking for a little more. She wants him to impress her, to pursue and win her. Frankly, I think she just wants to get into his pants. It’s a pretty straightforward desire in an interesting backdrop to the rest of the story. I think the story addresses directly a common gripe about Doctor Who stories. There is this ambiguous line usually drawn, where the idea of what kind of sexual or romantic drives the Doctor may have rarely appeared on screen. We have only had speculation about which companions may or may not have carried on romantic relationships with the Doctor. Is it all of them? Are his companions all just best friends who have been traveling with him? Or is it (mostly) a long list of ex-girlfriends? Throughout the years, some companions had a stronger bond with the Doctor, possibly even romantically, but the show never explicitly showcased it. It’s part of why all the kissing involved in the Paul McGann television special caused such a ruckus. Everyone knew or at least expected that the Doctor had relationships like that with many companions who traveled with him, but he didn’t openly involve himself romantically with them.

I think part of the controversy arises from the show being perceived as a children’s show.

Now it’s time for the show to grow up, and Rose will take us there.

It’s a new show, in a new time, for a fresh audience who were probably all children when the original show was on, at least many of us. Since the show targets those people, it only makes sense that we tackle these kinds of topics. The Doctor is reluctant to open up, and he plays this part well as if he’s speaking for all those previous Doctors where we didn’t know what his feelings were about. As the Doctor slowly opens up to Rose, he also opens up to us, and she’s the one who brings it out of him.

3) Enter an unfamiliar situation

The unfamiliar situation is the London Blitz. We arrive in a period of history where the characters can get lost. During the London Blitz, we are describing the period in World War II when Hitler was bombing Britain regularly. As the Doctor and Rose spread out, they encounter strange things going on. The Doctor faces the telephone in his front door ringing when it isn’t connected to anything, and the little boy with the gas mask chases away Rose. The Doctor meets Nancy, who warns him about the phone. Besides the show growing up and addressing the romantic feelings of the Doctor and how much he represses them, Nancy is an incredibly interesting character because she does two things that also cross the line and help the show grow up. Her story is about hiding a teen pregnancy. She also confronts a man about having a homosexual love affair, which was unheard of in the show.

4) Adapt to the situation

As they adapt, the Doctor and Rose are both telling different stories. Rose meets Jack, who has a flashy spaceship tied to Big Ben. He is all the open flash that the Doctor isn’t. At the time she doesn’t know that he’s a bisexual human from the future, another line this series crosses that would never have shown up in the original show. It’s almost like Russell T Davies gathered up all the sexual insecurities people had about the show and jammed them all into these two episodes.

While Rose’s off doing that, the Doctor is taking an interest in Nancy’s story. He can tell that she is helping children during the bombing and he wants to know more about her. In the end, she tells him he needs to go to the hospital and talk to the Doctor to find out more about The Empty Child. Just for a second, you could tell he wonders if when he goes up to the hospital he’ll encounter himself. I think that’s what everybody wants to happen, even though it doesn’t, and it’s fine. He thinks he might meet himself, a thought that only occurs in a brilliant facial move by Christopher Eccleston. I think what it means is that during this episode what’s happening is the Doctor is learning something about himself.

Next time, does the Doctor “Dance?”

The Screaming Staircase (Lockwood & Co. #1), by Jonathan Stroud

The Screaming Staircase by Jonathan Stroud

My rating: 4 of 5 stars


The Netflix series impressed me based on a series of books by Jonathan Stroud called Lockwood and Co. about a group of teenagers who fight ghosts in England. I thought it was incredibly inventive. I think possibly the only problem with the series is that it seems to be limited to southern England. I was even more delighted after watching the series, which I meant to watch one at a time, but ended up binge-watching because it was that good. It was then that I found out it was based on a series of books, and I knew that had to be the next book series that I got into.

Thanks, Netflix, I suppose for going ahead and canceling this beautiful series before it had a chance. I like the soundtrack; I like the series; I think the casting was beautiful, and the books are great. I read the first book, The Screaming Staircase, and I liked it so much that I went and bought the rest of them and I’ve got them sitting on my virtual bedside table ready to go. I committed to reading the entire series, hoping that the show would include them, but then they canceled it. Way to go Netflix. I do not understand your current plans, because you seem to cancel all the good things that you brought so far. I don’t have any confidence anymore in a Netflix-produced show, because I don’t believe you’ll ever get to a 5th season or the ending of a character arc or pretty much anything.

So aside from the fact that I’m fairly disappointed that the Netflix show ended and interested because The Screaming Staircase took up the first half of the first season of the show, I like this book. When I got the rest of the books, it took me a little while and I came back and reread this one before I started in on any of the rest of them; I found it to be just as engaging as the first time I read it.

It’s got a great first-person voice in the form of Lucy, who keeps us interested in what’s going on. We get to join her as she grows up learning how to fight ghosts and knowing that all the kids have kind of potential end date to their usefulness as ghost hunters. Stroud has set us up with a situation, where people get older. They are less and less attuned to the supernatural, so their ability to deal with what the story calls the problem becomes diminished.

It’s a great read, and I am looking forward to the rest of the series of books that come behind it.



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“Father’s Day,” Doctor Who, Season 1, Episode 8

This show’s entry follows the style of Dan Harmon’s story circle.

Dan Harmon's story circle

It’s probably harsh to say that I hate this episode. I never particularly thought it was a strong episode, and I think that Rose having a father who is missing growing up is almost sadder than getting to know him. He’s always been this kind of force in the back of her mind. I lost my father to Octobers ago; I lost my mom last December and I would do anything to get them back. So I understand Rose a lot more.

I would break the laws of time to have either of them back for a minute.

Father’s Day

1) In a zone of comfort

It starts with Rose as a child, remembering her mother telling her stories about how great her dad was, even though he was not. Her mother is telling stories about them like they are fairytales, building him up to be something in Rose’s mind that she could remember favorably, when he was no good, always trying some kind of scheme and running him and her mom out of money all the time.

2) They desire something

The desire in this episode is simple. Rose wants to see her dad. She knows when and where he died and she has access to a time machine. At first, she plans to go to him so that he doesn’t have to die alone, but she misses her chance waiting too long and wants to try again, and that’s when it all goes wrong. She races out at the wrong time, passing herself and the Doctor who are still standing on the street, and then saves his life instead of being there for him when he dies.

3) Enter an unfamiliar situation

Rose gets some time here with her dad, a time that she never would’ve had before. She’s able to talk to him about his schemes and talk to him about his relationship with her mother and how strained it is. She avoids being found out for who she is, but she confuses Pete because he trusts her implicitly and doesn’t seem to understand why he would just leave the house and later give her the keys to his car without thinking.

4) Adapt to the situation

At the same time, creatures begin to patrol the streets. They hang on the side of buildings giant black-winged monsters and attack people. They are wraiths who want to set time right. They get people in their backyards, and get people as they try to walk to a wedding. At the wedding Pete and Rose meet her mother Jackie who has baby Rose with her. Pete had been on his way here with the wedding present when he met his fate originally.

I just put that together “Pete Rose” really? Coincidence, right?

5) Get what they desired

Rose has her dad, however, people around, in a church at a wedding, and doing yard work start noticing it get cold, the Doctor can’t get back into the TARDIS, and the car that killed her father keeps showing up. Rose meets herself as a baby and sees her mom and dad fight. They love each other, but this is what they are really like,

6) Pay a heavy price for winning

As Rose lies about how good a father Pete was as she grew up, he figures out who Rose is. The creatures arrive to collect Pete and they hide in the church until Pete figures out he has to sacrifice himself.

When Rose touches the baby version of herself, it’s like the last straw, and the demons can get into the church. The Doctor being the oldest thing there, sacrifices himself to slow them down. Rose now has her father, but she’s lost the Doctor and she is stuck in time. The Doctor has put a heck of a lot of faith in Pete, that he’ll figure it out, and do the right thing to fix this.

He runs to the car that killed him and takes the hit, and the creatures vanish.

7) Return to their familiar situation

Now Jackie’s bedtime story has changed and an anonymous Rose comforting him is a part of it, having been there as he dies.

8) They have overall changed

Rose has learned how fragile time is, but is better for having met her father.

I will admit, for now, this episode makes me cry more than any of the rest of them do.

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